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EDIT 07/01/2013: To Improvement-Club: I'd like pretty much everything to be corrected if possible. Thank you.

Honestly, the only things I'm proud of with this one are the anatomy and the hair. I should have spent much more time on this instead of procrastinating, despite the fact that I started this drawing weeks ago...

Please critique! I really want to improve!


... and by that I don't mean start calling my art a piece of shit. Be respectful and actually try to HELP me, not troll me, please.
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I have to say, you're really improving, though I think there is still room for improvement here.

The line art is really thick. It makes the drawing look a little too cartoon-ey. The hair could use more work. Next time, try to make some more strands. The eye seems a little off-putting, too... Like, it shouldn't be that wide open (It kind of gives her a rape-vibe, no offence. XD)

The anatomy is okay. The shoulder and arm bother me, though. The arm is way too far out, and the shoulder is way too high up. Maybe is she was turned slightly, then it would look better. You might want to work on the feet too. They have sort of a horsey-hoof kind of look going.

All in all, it does look good. Just work on that anatomy and line art, and you'll do great. :)

Keep up the good work lovey. ^_^
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I really like this piece. upon scrolling through your gallery it caught my eye enough to click on it an see it in better detail.

this is with your young age in consideration...
way better at people than myself at 14, your color skills too.
i think with more work on the arms, head, neck, shoulder area it would look fantastic :)
the arms are a bit thin, the head doesn't sit right, like it fell off and was thrown back on, the foreshortening on the bent arm fell flat and i think the shoulder is a bit high on the straightened arm .. the feet not sure if they were covered by cloud to remove detail? still looks nice though
i think the hair would look nicer without the big bold outline and a bit more flow :)

the background goes nicely with with the pose
it creates a sense of 'heavenly', really refreshing

hope i have been helpful! keep up the good work!! :)
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Streled Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
I'm 23 and still can't freaking draw as good as this!:icondeskflipplz:

Er...
Is that me or her left hand seem to be mirrored?
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BaconMagic Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Nah, it's not mirrored.
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Streled Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Her finger look a little like a thumb...
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BaconMagic Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Really? I must fix that...
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Streled Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Yes, look at both hands.
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DestinyDecade Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's... very impressive. Wow.
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BaconMagic Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Really?
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DestinyDecade Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yep. Well done here.
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BaconMagic Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Thank you!
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DestinyDecade Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome.
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